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Aftermath
·August 20, 2003·1 min read·9 comments
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AW FUCK IT..THIS IS MY LOVE SONG..IT GOES LIKE THIS.. i sit by the fire n think, its 3 in the nite,havent slept a wink the nite is dark, cant see a star glimmer makin me forget if my eyes were open ever...

its painful to sleep, coz thats wen i lose track of reality as the curtain of dreams unfolds, n images of cherished moments awake from within me

how could you love me n leave me n never say gooodbye, how could i love you n forget you and not let a tear fall from my eye...

dawn will break in time, shatterin the cloak of the nite imperative for me to wake up, n shrug off the esoteric plight..

not evry question has an answer no matter how badly u seek in the mayhem wonder if time would make me forget that i ever lived through one of them

currents of life will drag me away from where i am not even sure been chasing a mirage for so long never knew illusions cud be so pure

u ve got to run hard to stand still so i sit here n think the pool i chanced upon in the desert was i dreamin or did i ever blink..

but there is one thing i know i can take everything in my stride if i could just get to know for once that i m not the only one who has cried.

What stayed with you?

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Amisharchive~2001-2003

its nice really nice

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Aftermatharchive~2001-2003

thx mate..hope there wasnt ne sarcasm that i missed in ur comment

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bulletarchive~2001-2003

On a scale of 1 to 10, 10 being the highest, i'd give it a 7. So, pretty cool Good job.

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Aftermatharchive~2001-2003

thx mate.coming from u,its a gr8 compliment by crackednut on August 27, 2003 (Wednesday) honestly, after the first para i didn't really want to scroll down. the language, the mood and the writing just didn't suit me. Atleast that's not what i wanted to read. But i must add that there was sense in those words. surely a lot of effort would have gone into writing such an article, which surely must acknowledge. Keep working on the style and try leaving out those (irritating) short forms. Good stuff!

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Aftermatharchive~2001-2003

thx mate..ur suggestions r appreciated.& i sincerely hope that i dont have to write such shit again...in words of The Who.."we wont get fooled again.."

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Amisharchive~2001-2003

no sarcasm dear...it reminds me of smt i wrote a long time back..n still in the aftermath of that mood.

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muddyarchive~2001-2003

Lovely work dear, I really felt as if U were telling my story.

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Aftermatharchive~2001-2003

appreciation appreciated...hope u survived the aftermath..:)

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muddyarchive~2001-2003

Not really , I feel this aftermath will never be over. Atleast not in this lifetime

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