Introspective ...
I am the air that you breathe I am the anger that you seethe I am the laughter that you drink I am the disaster on your brink I am the invisible halo around your head I am the being that you have fed I am the sleep that you elude I am the thought that makes you brood I am the greed that you need I am the flower from your seed I am the thorn you have pricked I am the blade you have nickedvI am the world you have lost I am the best at your worst I am the sickness that you fear I am the soul-slander you smear I am the spear that you blood-taint I am the devil you call saint I am you that you crave I am the life you want to save
What stayed with you?
A line that lingered, a feeling, a disagreement. Great comments are as valuable as the original piece.
Responses10
hey nilanjana , this is the first and probably the last time i will write to u , i know people approve of u and not me and thank god for that cos it wont be late when u realize that its a hell of a coincidence that ur and mine poems are posted on the same day and they so much fight each other in the philosophy of writing the poems. being a true poet to myself , i would suggest u to start writing for urself and not for people who appreciate cos they are so customized.hope u understand.
Ah! a very subjective comment! A finger-waggling, disapproving critic, stoically sterotyped! You are entitled to your opinions and I will not try to justify my intentions of writing poetry to you or to anyone else (as I have repeatedly said time and time again)! You have a "RIGHT" to your opinions and I will just leave it at that. And thanks for your comment, I like your brand of appreciation"!
hey nilanjana : u are one hell of a person and u now something u really got the meaning of the comment , i am glad cos i dont know why but people just dont seem to understand the subjective cannotation of the poem . they read u as a writer not as a poet and no doubt u have fans like bullet :sorry no defence to him , they denude u of the apparel subjectivism u are bestowed with and i will feel sorry if the world looses another gem of a dame in the bedlam of encumbered altruism . i am lucky , i believe . a lot to write but i will sum it up in few lines: from the hag and hungry goblin, that into the rags would rend ye, the spirit that stands by ur naked soul, in the books of moons defend ye.
There's a lot of mud slinging going on and I am an unwilling party to it. So let's just put an end to it. "Appreciation" is subjective and constructive criticism is always welcomed.
hi kruttik, i have had the opportunity to interact with the authoress in person, and believe u me, public acceptability of her writings does not drive her. she doesn't post at live2read to compete. for that matter she doesn't even post all that she writes. going by ur admission, if she did, people would altogether cease to read ur stuff !! anyways, i hope u'll appreciate that this forum is not one of competition. we who visit this site do so out of love for prose and poetry. welcome to the spirit ! Nilanjana's Biggest Fan by bullet on June 25, 2002 (Tuesday) Hey Nilanjana and Kruttik(Krutt'icky' really lol
There is no such thing as my "best" work or my "worst" work. I write because I need to. This is one aspect of life which is so unique amongst individuals that it cannot be compared. Competition in this case is belittling as it murders individuality. We are not present in this forum to teach individuals "lessons" or to become totally subjective. I am sure that I echo the attitudes of most of the readers and contributors in this forum - literary appreciation and interaction.
Lets just write and stop analyzing the s$%# out of it. I know all of us are motivated by different things in life and we have different questions in our mind. Let us respect that individuality that make us so uniquely human I would like to see people being faithful to their own writings rather than trying to analyze others As they say "Write and let write"
Like I have said previously, let us just respect individuality. An undur ruckus is being created that is marring the true spirit of this forum.
Like I have said previously, let us just respect individuality. An undue ruckus is being created that is marring the true spirit of this forum.
There is no such thing as my "best" work or my "worst" work. I write because I need to. This is one aspect of life which is so unique amongst individuals that it cannot be compared. Competition in this case is belittling as it murders individuality. We are not present in this forum to teach individuals "lessons" or to become totally subjective. I am sure that I echo the attitudes of most of the readers and contributors in this forum - literary appreciation and interaction.
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