What stayed with you?
A line that lingered, a feeling, a disagreement. Great comments are as valuable as the original piece.
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Your poem was quite strong until you threw love in there. Neways, good job... just need a certain degree of refinement.
I felt the same thing
Thankyou for your opinion. I guess what I was trying to convey is that even though such horrible things happen every day, something as trivial as a breakup could be in my thoughts more than such more important things. The poem is an expression of guilt. So in a way, I guess it "should" feel wrong, because that is the feeling expressed. I do understand what you mean though. Thanks for the input!!
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